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People think that the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion

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In recent decades, humans have been facing several vital environmental problems that impact not only nature but
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 it has direct effects on our life. One of the most important problems is air pollution
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 of using fusile fuel for
transportation
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 or industry.
People
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 believe that government should concern about it and the hazard impacts of it should be controlled by increasing the price.
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 I agree with
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, I think there are many appropriate alternative solutions to solve the problem. On the one hand, the
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 solution to reduce oil consumption is that governments raise the price of it.
People
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 prefer to use private
cars
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 for their daily
transportation
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 and even their journeys.
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, they decrease using own
cars
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 if they have to more investment.
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 authorities can reduce the amount of fuel and its impact, it does not properly work in long term.
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, national law for increasing taxes on tobacco goods cannot help to solve the problem of using those products and I think that legislation on oil price does not work as well.
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, the authorities ought to apply alternative solutions for
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 situation.
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, public
transportation
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 should be increased and
people
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 encourage not only to use of public
transportation
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 like metro or taxi but
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 using bicycles and electrical scooters
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 of their private car.
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,
people
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 should aware of the impact of increasing carbon emissions on the atmosphere.
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, governments should investigate renewable energies for use on
cars
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 and other vehicles.
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, Tesla using electricity on their
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 which is eco-friendly fuel. To conclude,
although
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 forcing
people
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 to pay more money for petrol is the
first
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 step of consideration, it works for a while. Government and individuals must lend a helping hand to solve the greenhouse gas problem.
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