There are severe social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve this problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

At present, several countries have a serious social problem about a lack of residence in

city

towns, and they believe only the administration can improve it. As

this

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statement, I totally agree with it because the

government

can operate the policy to expand jobs to rural areas, and They can develop countrysides to

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convenient to live in.

Firstly

, one of the reasons why I agree is the administration can operate the policy to the extent

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employment

to

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outside the

cities

. Japanese's

government

, for

exaple

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, they are able to stop a huge number of people to

move

in

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the

cities

. Because they reduce the tax imposed on the companies which are relocated in the rural areas.

Therefore

, many

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move

out

to

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outside the

cities

. From

this

result, young generation

have

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the job in their hometown.

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they do not need to

move

into the capital

city

. It can decrease the issue

about

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housing shortages.

Secondly

, to reduce

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lack of

home

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, the

government

can solve

this

trouble by increasing facilities for more

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in

countrysides

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. Based on my country, a large number of people relocate to the capital

city

which is Bangkok because they require

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ease of transport. The

government

solve

this

issue by increasing public transportations

such

as buses, local taxies, subway and so on. From

this

result, people who desire to

move

into Bangkok change their

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so, a lack of housing in

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is lesser than before. In conclusion, the trouble of home shortages in the downtown can be improved by only the

government

. In my opinion, I absolutely agree with it because they can operate the policy to extend the employment to rural areas, and they can develop outside the

cities

to

more

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convenient.