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There are severe social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve this problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At present, several countries have a serious social problem about a lack of residence in
city
 towns, and they believe only the administration can improve it. As
this
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 statement, I totally agree with it because the
government
 can operate the policy to expand jobs to rural areas, and They can develop countrysides to
more
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 convenient to live in.
Firstly
, one of the reasons why I agree is the administration can operate the policy to the extent
an
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employment
to
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outside the
cities
. Japanese's
government
, for
exaple
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, they are able to stop a huge number of people to
move
in
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 the
cities
. Because they reduce the tax imposed on the companies which are relocated in the rural areas.
Therefore
, many
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move
 out
to
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outside the
cities
. From
this
 result, young generation
have
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 the job in their hometown.
Moreover
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 they do not need to
move
 into the capital
city
. It can decrease the issue
about
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 housing shortages.
Secondly
, to reduce
a
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 lack of
home
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homes
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, the
government
 can solve
this
 trouble by increasing facilities for more
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 in
countrysides
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. Based on my country, a large number of people relocate to the capital
city
 which is Bangkok because they require
an
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ease of transport. The
government
 solve
this
 issue by increasing public transportations
such
 as buses, local taxies, subway and so on. From
this
 result, people who desire to
move
 into Bangkok change their
mind
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 so, a lack of housing in
city
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 is lesser than before. In conclusion, the trouble of home shortages in the downtown can be improved by only the
government
. In my opinion, I absolutely agree with it because they can operate the policy to extend the employment to rural areas, and they can develop outside the
cities
 to
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 convenient.
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