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Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good members of society. Other, however, believe that school is the place to learn it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is generally accepted that
society
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 has played an important role at the present especially, staying together in school. Some
people
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 feel that families should teach how to be good members of
society
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.
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, others think that school is the place to learn it.
This
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 essay will discuss both points of view and my personal opinion. On one side of the argument, there are
people
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 who argue that parents should teach their children to be good members of
society
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. Some experts find that participation between family and their children,
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 as spending time together can lead to better adaptation and communication in
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 faster.
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 is mainly because the activities participation may be one of the factors to improve children’s behaviour. On the other side of the argument, other
people
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 are of the opinion that school is the place to learn about the approach of good members of
society
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. Some researchers maintain that discipline should be arranged in courses to teach students.
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, in the course,
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the teacher
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 should teach about assist
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, living in
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 world, or their friend
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • instilling
  • mimicking
  • social norms
  • ethical behavior
  • citizenship education
  • societal expectations
  • interpersonal skills
  • collaboration
  • diverse environment
  • microcosm
  • communication skills
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