IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

#room #college #student #arrangement #work #accommodation #officer #situation
I would like to bring to your notice regarding some of these students are doing smoking within the hostel premises which is causing us
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
not to have good sleep due to
this
 bad smell all around the campus. As you know that, if we do not have
good
Add an article
a good
show examples
 environment and
tidy
Correct article usage
a tidy
show examples
 place and
then
 we may not get comfort sleep and peace of mind too and
this
 may lead to deviation at my workplace and
finally
 may end up with health-related issues. If possible, please do some random checks
Correct your spelling
within
show examples
with in
Correct your spelling
within
show examples
 the rooms. I am sure that you may found some smoking sticks around the campus. With all
this
Add a comma
,this
show examples
 I would request you to please maintain good hygiene at our living place and it would be extremely good if you allot a separate room so that I may not get any issues with others. I
am look
Change the verb form
am looking
show examples
 forward to hearing an update on new guidelines and some strict conditions within our premises
Submitted by tejakondapalli88 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
What to do next:
Look at other essays: