You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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I would like to bring to your notice regarding some of these students are doing smoking within the hostel premises which is causing us

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not to have good sleep due to

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bad smell all around the campus. As you know that, if we do not have

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environment and

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place and

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we may not get comfort sleep and peace of mind too and

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may lead to deviation at my workplace and

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may end up with health-related issues. If possible, please do some random checks

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the rooms. I am sure that you may found some smoking sticks around the campus. With all

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I would request you to please maintain good hygiene at our living place and it would be extremely good if you allot a separate room so that I may not get any issues with others. I

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forward to hearing an update on new guidelines and some strict conditions within our premises

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

163 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Topic Vocabulary:

accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
academic performance
well-being
respectfully request

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