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Evironmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little.

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Introduction
These days, who is responsible for environmental
protection
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 is a controversial topic. Some
people
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 think that the government or
politicians
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 have to ensure that the earth is protected, but I cannot entirely agree with
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 view.
Body paragraph 1
People
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 believe that the environmental problem is so serious that it cannot be solved by individual
power
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.
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, only
politicians
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 have considerable
power
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 and influence to solve the problem. It is difficult for ordinary
people
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 to have enough influence to get governments, international NGOs, and individual campaigners to focus on the same issue, but
politicians
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 can. Global warming,
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, as not a regionalised event, requires not only the attention of all the relevant institutions in all regions but
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 the financial, human, and intellectual resources of these institutions, as individuals are far from being able to bear the costs required to ameliorate global warming.
Body paragraph 2
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, relying on
politicians
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 alone is not enough, or if the
power
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 of government is vital for other issues, it is the
power
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 of the public
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 key for environmental issues.
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,
energy
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 is in short supply, and governments can only work to develop new
energy
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 sources.
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, according to scientists, oil, which
people
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 now mainly depend on, will only support
people
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's production and livelihoods for 40-50 years at the current rate. So, only if everyone reduces their
energy
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 consumption will it be possible to support them until new alternative
energy
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 sources are discovered. That means why individual efforts are
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 highly crucial when it comes to environmental
protection
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I reiterate the firm belief that in the face of environmental problems, it is not enough to rely on the efforts of
politicians
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 but
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 to involve the
power
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 of individuals. One small step for everyone towards environmental
protection
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 is a big step for the world towards environmental
protection
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental protection
  • responsibility
  • politicians
  • individuals
  • large-scale
  • policies
  • regulations
  • impact
  • corporations
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • resources
  • expertise
  • collective efforts
  • difference
  • combination
  • crucial
  • effective
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