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Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that some earlier advances in technology have been very influential,
such
 as those related to technology around the home. Devices
such
 as washing machines, fridges and freezers, central heating, microwaves and televisions were invented many years ago, and now nearly every household has all or some of these in their home, making life much easier. Though they have been improved over time, they still carry out much the same purpose as when they were first invented. Another example is that of medicine. Despite the fact that there have been ground-breaking recent medical
developments
,
such
 as that connected to research into genes and stem cells, the benefits to the average person are still many years away. The most influential impacts on health have been earlier technological
developments
 of the past, which remain today. These are the ability to treat so many injuries and diseases and carry out organ transplants in hospitals. It is these that have benefits on so many lives and will for decades to come.
However
, if we look at some more recent
developments
, they have had a much greater influence than in the past.
For instance
, there is the phone, which was a significant development when invented
helping
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 many people.
However
,
although
 invented many years ago, technological
developments
 over the
last
 few decades have enabled the phone to
now
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be mobile and connected to the internet.
This
 has had incredible impacts on the way people
Iive
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Live
 their lives with people using phones for so many everyday activities and for connecting around the world. In conclusion, I would argue that
although
 some older technological
developments
 are important, some new ones are too. The impacts on ordinary people’s lives
therefore
depends
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 on the type of technology in question.
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