In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed. What is your opinion about this?

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people

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social networking sites are creating a huge negative impact on individuals and society.

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essay would discuss

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the issues being caused while using social

media

and how it can be utilized for

betterment

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the betterment

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of society.

Firstly

, every individual has easily found a way to access

internet

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the internet

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, eventually making their way to social networking sites. The social

media

platforms

such

as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram have very innovative ways of attracting

people

and not imposing any sort of age restriction to use the platform. The recent survey conducted in Washington, DC declares that 40 % of overall population use social

media

almost every day on an average of 3 to 4 hours and

this

indeed is causing

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issues

such

people

started getting depressed comparing their life with others on social

media

seeing their vacation pictures and achievement posts.

Also

using social

media

at night in darkness is heavily causing sleep disorders. In

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people

started considering themselves worthful only if they have more friend requests

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Facebook than in real life. Considering all

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points social

media

is likely causing

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impact on most of our lives.

Secondly

, social

media

websites can

also

be beneficial if they are used in an appropriate way for good causes

such

as during COVID time many celebrities have come forward through live streams to share awareness and explain the precautions to be taken.

Hence

if used appropriately social

media

can be made a platform

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more meaningful information for mankind.

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essay has discussed on both positive and negative impacts, and I would say definitely social

media

is causing negative impact but we as an individual should know the risks and take precaution to prevent these platforms from

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our lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed. What is your opinion about this?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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