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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been suggested that reading books play a positive role for
people
 to develop more
imagination
 and
language
skills
 than
TV
 programs. To my way of thinking, to some extent, I agree that reading
book
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 has an impact on
imagination
, but I would
also
 argue that reading has lots of shortcomings. To
more
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be more
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 specific, since human beings are created in
this
 galaxy, there are various words from different parts of
world
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the world
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, like China, Egypt and other old civilizations. Those records
exit
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exist
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for
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from
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generation
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the generation
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 to generation,
people
 could have an imitate touch through those reliable words to expand horizons and enlarge
imagination
 about the whole history.
Otherwise
,
although
 watching
TV
 could catch the excellent scenarios,
listening
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 the whisper sounds and voice, those
artifact
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 things might be
the
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counterfeit one and betray the real history. Yet, it does not automatically mean that reading is functional for all
people
 to develop
language
skills
.
In other words
, it is hard for a primary school student to grip
those
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 meanings of much more profound books, like Post-Philosophy Era and other masterpieces, it is highly likely for those students to misunderstand the real meaning of a word.
By contrast
,
TV
 programs for those children with various themes are able to develop the
language
skills
 for them. In conclusion, it is true that reading has lots of benefits, but
also
 has
few
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of
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drawbacks.
People
 could promote more
imagination
 and
language
skills
 by combining those two functional parts, reading books and watching
TV
 programs.
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