The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party explain why you won't be able to attend the party give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time.

Hello Mr. and Mrs. Vahora, I hope you are both doing well. I was delighted to receive your invitation to
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surprise
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birthday party. I am pretty sure that
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would absolutely love it, as he loves celebrations and spending quality time with friends and family members.
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, the
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will make it even more interesting, I can't imagine how amazed he will be after seeing the
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. Unfortunately, I regret to let you know that I have my exams running
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that week, so I won't be able to attend
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party. I truly wish I could be there to see
Chris
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's reaction and celebrate it with everyone.
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, I would love to meet
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separately to celebrate his special day together.
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, I am planning to take him out for
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dinner at his favourite restaurant and
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we will go
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bowling together.
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way, we can spend some quality time together.
Chris
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's Friend, Safwan Vahora

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coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a logical flow, which helps in understanding the message. However, consider adding a little more detail about Chris's specific qualities that make him enjoy celebrations.
greeting and closing
You might want to vary your opening and closing to make it feel more personalized and warm. Phrases like 'I appreciate your thoughtfulness in inviting me' could enhance your greeting.
single idea per paragraph
You did well to keep one idea per paragraph, but try to use a wider range of cohesive devices to link your ideas, such as 'In addition' or 'Moreover' to introduce new thoughts more fluidly.
tone
Your positive tone and warmth in conveying your thoughts cheerfully reflect well on your relationship with Chris and his family, which is lovely!
clarity
The way you explained your inability to attend due to exams is clear and respectful, showing consideration for their event while expressing your regrets.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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