TASK2: Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Individuals
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generally disputed that
information
should be getting
easily
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for students, academic researchers or scientists whereas others support opposite ideas so they
convinced
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that
information
is caused
be
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by
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risk and misused by other
countries
. While some
argues
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that it would be better
concealing
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to conceal
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information
for protecting
of
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countries
, I believe that everyone should be able to get
information
in order to improve their labours. There are various reasons why people believe that
information
is protected due to not only abuse but
also
constitute
of
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danger. Some
of
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Countries
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which
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powerful do not
share
confidential data of related
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in order to inhibit
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the attack
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attack
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of
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on
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potential
countries
.
For instance
, The North Korea Government determined that never contact
to
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other
countries
about themselves all of
year
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ago.
Therefore
, they follow
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life because of their safety.
Moreover
, Some
of
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Countries
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the Countries
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which
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that
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have similar ideas use
restrict
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internet
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the internet
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and do not
share
videos photos or news about their lifestyle or problems
of
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their country.
On the other hand
, Numerous Individuals accepted that everyone
need
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to get
information
owing to their development in career or education.
Similarly
, Society always
addict
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to learn and teach so getting
information
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have
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to be free.
In addition
to
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, Some Poor
countries
do not have enough Money
thus
most
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effective way is using
internet
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the internet
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for
information
.
Majority
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of Universities
share
researches freely, they aim to provide
information
interchange. Exemplify, Oxford and Harvard Universities give online lectures free for poor
countries
students. In conclusion,
although
some
of
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countries
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believe that prevent
to
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sharing
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share
information
for their safety, others are vice versa. I totally support
share
information
owing to
evolution
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the evolution
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of humanity.
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  • collaboration
  • accelerates progress
  • innovative discoveries
  • transparency
  • open access
  • verify results
  • fraudulent
  • ethical practices
  • consumer trust
  • potential risk
  • misuse
  • sensitive information
  • genetic data
  • defense-related technologies
  • proprietary information
  • trade secrets
  • competitive edge
  • value
  • investment of time and resources
  • compensation
  • disincentivize
  • recoup costs
  • balanced approach
  • policies and agreements
  • sensitive data
  • fair compensation
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