The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is fact that most
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health
problems
related to it. Some people assert that these problems
are the results of carelessness and irresponsible behavior
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children
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from government
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health
.
Firstly
, parents
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children
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and take care of them. Motivating children
to participate in different sports
activities such
as cycling, swimming, playing football and so on , could be very
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claims
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children
whose parents
motivate and support their kids to involve in some sports
are physically fit and face only few
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health
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Secondly
, it is to be noted that children
should be given more freedom to play outdoor than watching TV and playing video games on computer
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children
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children
’s health
directly or indirectly. Above all, the most practical way to keep children
healthy is making sports
and PT classes compulsory by schools
. Many health
problems
in children
like obesity, diabetes, heart diseases are caused due to the lack of body exercises
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exercise
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sports
classes are made compulsory in schools
. Thus
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and individual should be well conscious Fix the agreement mistake
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their Change preposition
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health
and participate in physical exercises.
When it comes to government
, we should be well aware that even if government
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health
facilities to children
but they don’t get involve
in any sorts of Change the form of the verb
involved
sports
or do exercises , they just can’t lose their weight and may have to face many health
problems
in future. In order to, remain healthy and avoid health
issues, government
can launch Add an article
the government
health
programs and awareness related to health
in public but at last
it is Add a comma
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parents
and individuals who should practice healthy
lifestyle. Add an article
a healthy
For example
; those children
and parents
who made their children
practice healthy
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heavy weight
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problems
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schools
can play another major role after parents
organizing sports
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children
might find interesting.
To conclude, I believe that parents
, schools
and each individual should be more preventive and responsible regarding children
’s health
and possible health
problems
that obesity could bring. Thus
, rather than blaming government
all the time for everything, we should be more practical and take care of the Correct article usage
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children
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite