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In many countires, there are an increasing number of private cars. What are the advantages and disadvtanges of this trend?

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It is proven that the number of people who have their own
car
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 is increased and
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 situation will have some consequence. In
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 essay, I am going to discuss the
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pros
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prons
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pros
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 and cons
in
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of
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 having a
car
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 and
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, I will give my opinion.
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, I think that the personal vehicle can give you the
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independence
 from others
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fact
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 you can move wherever you want, without care about time table or connections related to other vehicles.
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, one more advantage is that you can bring with you what you want due to the
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 that you have your own space, in
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, if we think about public transports, there are several restrictions about weight or dangerous tools and so you can not bring them,
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, going with your own vehicle allows the owner to bring
whaterver
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whatever
 he wants.
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 there are beneficial consequences in having a
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, I believe that whether everyone
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 their personal vehicle there will be a problem. The
fact
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 is provided by the traffic jam in the biggest cities, especially
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 hours during the day, when you can not move because the time for arriving at destination will double,
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 if the number of
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car
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cars
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 will increase,
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 problem will not be solved and the traffic congestion continued to be an issue. In conclusion, I think that being the owner of a
car
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 can be useful because you have your
indipendence
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independence
 from other transport but it will be
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 a problem because it can improve a number of problems like
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traffic jam.
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