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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Undoubtedly, there are both positive and negative consequences of using
technology
 by
children
 in their leisure period.
This
 essay tends to discuss both perspectives and I will explain why I think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Technology
 has provided us with innumerable benefits.
Firstly
,
children
 can use the Internet in their free
time
 to explore their fields of
interests
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. By doing
this
 they can gain
wealth
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 of knowledge like learning about new countries and cultures would help to broaden their horizon. Several studies have shown that teenagers who spend more
time
 on the Internet have a wider view of the world.
Secondly
, with the help of new technologies young people can make their own identity in the world of
technology
.
For instance
, nowadays we can see that very young
children
 are achieving titles in Guinness World Records for their discoveries in computer fields.
However
, every good
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 come with some side effects. Due to excessive use of
technology
,
children
 are leading a sedentary lifestyle since they are always playing computer games rather than spending
time
 doing outdoor activities.
Consequently
, increasing the chances of developing obesity and  weaker eyesight.
Moreover
, youngsters can become addicted by playing video games
thus
 affecting their studies.
For example
, the government of South Korea banned
children
 from playing video games after midnight as the problem was so great and the effect on education was very negative. To conclude,
although
 there are several drawbacks of
technology
 usage in free
time
, it would be unfair to ignore the benefits it has provided us with.
Therefore
, in my opinion, the pros far outbalanced the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Inappropriate content
  • Self-learning
  • Screen time
  • Social inequality
  • Enhanced communication
  • Creative expression
  • Educational resources
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