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Some people say the main way to be happy is ife is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make pople happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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Having a lot of
money
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 is believed to be the answer
for
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 a happy
life
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. People that have a great
amount
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number
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 of financial resources might have access to goods and to a
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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that is
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 very much desired. But there are lots of other things that are very important for happiness that
money
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 can not buy.
Money
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 is crucial in
life
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, especially in a capitalist society, therefor quality of
life
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 is directly linked to how much someone holds on the bank account. Having
money
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 is important to provide access to health services, food, housing and education.
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, after satisfying all the basic needs, the individual can dream,
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, the person is able to really live
instead
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 of just survive.
Money
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also
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 brings a feeling of safety, so having
fanacial
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financial
 safety makes it is
possibleto
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possible to
 take chances and make decisions based on passion and not fear.
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, having
money
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 enables consumers to buy goods as they wish.
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 the other hand, there are lots of things that are crucial for a happy
life
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 that can not be bought. Having
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healthy
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heathy
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healthy
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 relationships, being loved, having a purpose, having freedom of
speach
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speech
 and feeling safe are just some
exemples
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examples
. To conclude,
money
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 is the main
ressource
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resource
 for
a
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apply
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living a happy
life
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, but it is not the only one. There are other important aspects of
life
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 that make us happy.
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