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Many people today do not know their neighbors as well as they did in the past. What is the cause of this problem? What can be done to solve it?

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In
this
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 modern world,
people
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 are so busy in their own life that they hardly interact with their neighbours. Sometimes they don't even know the name of the
people
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 living close to them. There could be many reasons for these, one of them could be their busy life. Notwithstanding, the disclosure delves into these vantage points, and
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 will explain why I think so.
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, I think
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 are socializing less with the
families
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 living nearby. The reasons could be their hectic job schedule. Because everyone is so involved in their jobs, that they hardly get to spend the
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 with their spouse or kids.
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, I have a friend who works in a particular company, and his work schedule is at least 10 hours per day for 6 days a week. And, that's why they try to spend the
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 with their children, and not with their neighbours.
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 , in past,
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 invest their
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 meeting others because there was no means of distraction
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 as phones, computers etc. In order to solve
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, I think
families
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 should leave in an environment where there is more interaction with the
families
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 living in their proximity. For these ,
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 apartments could be the best place where the
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 members can arrange weekly or monthly social gatherings to get to know everyone better.
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, in the
society
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 I live in, the
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 members send invitations to various events where everyone can come with their
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 and chill. We get together in groups and play games , eat together and chill. In conclusion, I think
people
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 should give some
time
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 meeting new
people
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, and getting to know each other.
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, in the current ,world there are so many gadgets which keep
people
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 interacting with other
people
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.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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