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Some people believe that children are given too much free time.They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children shoul spend their time?

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In every country, we all have different views and different opinions about what is the best
Education
 model. We have seen a
lot
 of
controversy
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, especially including Physical
Education
classes
 during
time
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the time
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 to school or not. In
this
 essay, we will discuss
differents
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 opinions from both sides.
Firstly
, as said often,
sport
 is very important for health. It may avoid major
problem
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problems
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such
 as cardiovascular
diseas
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disease
 or
artherosclerosis
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atherosclerosis
. In order to have good academics grades. It has been proved that
sport
 is useful
keeping
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students
 active as much physically than mentally. When you are feeling good in your body, your brain feels healthy as well and do not struggle to learn. Obviously, doing
sport
 doesn't
makes
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 you smarter but, it makes
children
 more dynamics and motivated to achieve many goals. Indeed, when we are doing
sport
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 we activate a brain's area which is linked
whith
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with
 perseverance and abilities to work longer . It might
also
 help against overweight which is
a
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 main problem in a
lot
 of countries like in the USA.
On the other hand
,
this
 view has some
faillures
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failures
. Whereas
children
 are running or doing any
sport
, they do not study academic subjects. Some people
also
 think that it is up to parents to make their
children
 sporty.
However
, some parents are working too much, or don't have enough money to pay for a
lot
 of activities
to
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 their
children
. There is
also
 the fact that doing
sport
 makes
students
 exhausted and it is sometimes worse. If
students
 run for two hours and
then
 they need to stay focused on a tricky mathematics demonstration, it might be difficult to follow. To conclude Physical
Education
classes
 have a
lot
 of benefits and drawbacks, it is good for health but it can tired
students
 or take too much
time
 on their school
time
. I believe that we need to have both academic subjects and Physical
Education
classes
, but it must be thought smartly in the
time table
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timetable
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. We must learn academics subject
on
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 the morning and sometimes, have some Physical
Education
classes
on
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in
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 the afternoon, in order to keep away stress or anxiety.
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