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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are planning a holiday to Australia. You have been given the name and address of a hotel in the centre of Sydney and would like further information. Write a letter to the hotel. Ask about the availability of the rooms and the hotel's facilities. Find out if the hotel arranges day trips and ask them to send you a brochure. You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter to enquire about the accommodation facilities at your "JKM Residency". My colleague suggested the name and address of your hotel. As
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 is located at 814 Grey Alder Street, Sydney, I want to clear the following queries. First of all, I need your guidance about the type of room available with the price range during the first week of November. We are two colleagues and need a separate room during our stay.
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, please don't forget to mention the amenities included in the booking like access to WiFi and television, hot and cold water facility.
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, I want to elicit information on whether you provide any tourist travel packages for local visiting spots during the daytime. If so,
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 what will it cost me, and which payment method is most reliable to you? One additional request, kindly provide us brochure so that we will get more clarity about the exclusive services. I am waiting for your prompt reply. Yours faithfully, Navdeep
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Your letter is well-structured, but you may improve it slightly by ensuring a smoother transition between the paragraphs. For instance, you could use linking words like 'Additionally' or 'Moreover' to start the second paragraph which would aid in better cohesion.
task achievement
While the letter covers all necessary queries and maintains a formal tone, make sure that the tone remains consistent throughout. Mentioning 'hot and cold water facility' can be phrased more formally.
task achievement
The purpose of your letter is clear, and you have provided specific details regarding your inquiries.
coherence cohesion
The structure is logical and easy to follow. Each paragraph addresses a different part of your inquiry, keeping the letter organized.
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