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In many countries, schools have severe problems with students behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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A lot of schools are facing a variety of challenges these days. One of the challenges across the nation is struggling with
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behaviour
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss the possible causes and propose ways how to overcome them. One of the main causes of
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 is the lack of discipline at
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. In the past, schools had much more control over everything from dress code to how neat the
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 should write. These days
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 do not have same the authority
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 in the past and
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 lead to
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 behaving in whichever way they seem fit. Indeed, just
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 month, a teacher was physically attacked by two
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 in Scotland. The
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 were not banned or even expelled from
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 kind of
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 spreads a message to other
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 that they can behave badly without facing any consequences. Another contributing factor that may lead to a
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 bad
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 at
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, is that their
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 do not have set rules at home. Some
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 are very lenient at home allowing their children to make up their own rules and run wild. If a
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 does not have rules at home
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 it will contribute to their
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, some
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 might
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 undermine the
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 and
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 authority if they are informed of their
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's
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, which allows the
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 to believe that their
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 will always come up for them no matter what they do. Clearly,
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 bad
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 from
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 can be curbed. In order to overcome it,
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 and
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 need to work together.
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 should trust the teacher's judgement when they reprimand a
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 bad
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 and
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 should be given the authority to give a
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 detention if they were disrespectful. In conclusion,
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 and
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 should work together to combat
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's
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 at
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. It is not an impossible task as by working together they help the
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