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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To whant extant do you agree with this statement

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In the present age, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether wealth can not guaranty to have a joyful and calm
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.personally, I totally agree with
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 statement and I feel that way because of two reasons which I will explain in the following essay. The primary reason we have to take into consideration is that there are many things in our
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 that could not be bought with money. Precisely, one of the most important factors that humans need to have a happy
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 is a healthy body. It could be said that if individuals or their family members are suffering from a chronic or incurable disorder, they will never feel completely happy.
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, for wealthy parents who have a sick child and are not able to find a definite treatment for their kids, their money will be useless and it won't provide a
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 full of happiness for them. The
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 reason
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 worth pointing out is that usually persons who have a huge asset are working quite hard and spending their days with their business. As a consequence, most of the time they are busy and do not have enough time for their family and friends.
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, children need their parent's attention and would like to spend some hours per day with them, but when parents only care about their career and try to get more money
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 of their kids, it leads to some mental problems
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 as depression or insomnia in children. To sum up, I would like to say that I strongly believe that wealth can make
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 easier but it never has been able to guarantee it. There are many factors that contribute to having a joyful lifespan like health, family, and etc.
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, it could be concluded that people have to concentrate on more important factors to feel happy all the time.
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