Despise the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done to solve this problem?

In the present age, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether
although
there are many advances made in agriculture but the
number
of hungry
people
does not decrease. In fact, the main reason that contributes to
this
problem is that spreading the
food
products
is not equal across the world. On top of that, some measures
such
as helping weaker areas on the earth by reacher ones should
be take
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to tackle that problem as soon as possible.
To begin
with, it could be said that despite the improvements in
agriculture
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the agriculture

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industry in the past years, the
number
of hungry
people
does not
changed
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significantly. The main reason for
this
phenomenon is that
food
products
are not spreading across the globe equally.
Furthermore
, it is obvious that as always the developed and wealthy
countries
are able to provide
food
products
with high quality for their society.
On the other hand
, economically weaker nations do not have
this
opportunity to feed their
people
.
For example
, students in a school in the USA have a weekly
food
schedule that includes all the required
nitritions
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for their growth. In comparison, children in some parts of Africa do not have even a simple daily
food
portion.
However
, there are some solutions available to combat that problem like donating agricultural
products
to the
countries
that contain a huge
number
of hungry
people
.
For example
,
the
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wealthy societies can create some charities and collect money to send them to
the
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areas that have high poverty
rate
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.
In addition
, the governments have a responsibility to help these
countries
and send the required amounts of agricultural
products
like rice and barely to them. To sum up, it could be concluded that because some
countries
do
no
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have a good financial statement to improve their agriculture industry, it makes
a
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duty for economically stronger communities to assist them. By doing that, the rate of poverty
as well as the
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, as well as the number of hungry persons,

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number
of hungry persons will deserve gradually.
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