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In some cities, there is less control over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings. People can build in whatever style they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some cities allow citizens to
freedomly
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freedom
 build and design
thier
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their
 residences, office, flats, and condominium, regardless
to
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 constructing regulations, which secure the suitable functions
,
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 and
being
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 the ideal homes as
thier
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their
 preferences.
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, in my perspective, construction without planning contributes to various drawbacks including
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 to life
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 and obscured
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natural views. The benefit of building
house
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a house
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freedomly
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freedom
 is that the design matches
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the owner preferences. The pursuit of happiness is able to pursue by having the ideal house, which matches
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your function and style.
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, you can build a
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vacation
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 home near to the beach, which you can see sunrise
everyday
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.
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, you can construct the resorts in the sanctuary, which you can hear the
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 sing, and see wild animals closely.
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, the most imperative consideration for
building
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the building
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 is safety. Constructing without
a
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proper instruction can lead to the risk of an accident. The explosion of the foam producing factory in Samutprakarn province can be
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 the company is located in close proximity to the community zone.
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, the construction without restriction is attributed to a reduction in the beauty of nature.
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, the high tower located near the beautiful beach in Thailand makes tourists cannot see the view of sand, sea, and sunrise.
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,
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building
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buildings
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 should be legally obliged to comply
the
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constructing
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 rules. In summary, the drawbacks of building residence, irrespective of legislation significantly outnumber the benefits
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it
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.
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,
building
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 should be managed and designed according to the
reccomended
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recommended
 instruction, which is strictly imposed by the relevant organization.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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