Some people think that purpose of museums should be to attract and entertain young people. Others believe that the purpose of a museum is to educate, not entertain. Discuss both view and give opinion

Fuel
is the most essential resource in our modern society,
coals
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and natural gas fire up power plants and light up billions of homes across the world, petrol and kerosene
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car engines to connect people in an unimaginable
way
we could never think of. Yet, some say increasing the
prices
of
fuel
would help solve global environmental issues,
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inevitably will, but the disruptions to our lives might be a huge drawback that we can never afford. Promotions and government incentives to clean renewable
energy
is the best
way
to replace traditional fuels.
This
is crucial to reduce greenhouse gases emission because the
prices
of green
energy
are still higher than fossil fuels in many places like the oil exporters, Saudi Arabia and Russia. Even Australia,
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wind and solar rich country, has to offer subsidies to homes to set up solar panels on rooftops. As green
energy
is the best and only alternative to burning the polluting ancient rocks, yet more expensive, the only
way
to promote
that is
through subsidies. So, some might be saying, what if we increase the
prices
of traditional
fuel
, is not it the same? No. From the glimpse of human history, the Kyoto Protocol, a global agreement of reducing greenhouse gases emission, can never be enforced in different
countries
because of their own interests. With the same logic, if every global leader sat together, would they agree on increasing the
prices
of
fuel
collaboratively? The
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countries
will be furious because of the decrease in export. The under-developed
countries
will suffer even more because they need fossil
fuel
to power their
countries
but they do not have the capital to buy even more expensive raw
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, even likely not having the technology to develop large scale clean
energy
projects. These
countries
will never say yes, so it will be impossible to reach a global agreement. To sum up, increasing the
prices
of
fuel
will never be successful internationally.
Thus
, the only best
way
to reduce greenhouse gases emission is through individual government incentives and subsidies to green
energy
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preserve
  • heritage
  • edutainment
  • interactive
  • exhibits
  • innovative
  • multimedia
  • curatorial
  • archival
  • artifacts
  • immersive
  • cultural literacy
  • historical accuracy
  • engagement
  • narratives
  • pedagogy
  • infotainment
  • docent
  • cognitive
  • appreciation
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