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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT EVENTUALLY ALL JOBS WILL BE DONE BY ARTIFICIALLY INTELLIGENT ROBOTS. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION

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As technology is advancing at a swift pace, many people envision that any kind of
tasks
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 will be ultimately entrusted to artificial intelligence.
This
 essay partially disagrees with that statement. While it is beneficial to
humans
 to let
robots
 do our works, I believe that some jobs still require our intervention.
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 human assignment
that is
 repetitive and conditional in nature can easily be automated. When given a high volume of monotonous tasks, human is inclined to grow fatigued owing to having to repeat a seemingly never-ending process;
therefore
, the accuracy and productivity significantly drop.
Robots
,
on the other hand
, do not have the faintest idea about feeling tired.
Additionally
, they possess some cutting-edge technologies, which help them tackle the problems with minimal errors and possibly the highest output. A survey on automation in the back end banking process in India reveals that not only does the process errors drop by 95% but
also
 productivity increases by 80% if robotic automation is implemented. For these reasons, human effort on regular menial work can be replaced by robotic automation.
Conversely
, jobs involving emotion and intuition will continue to be done by
humans
.
This
 could be exemplified through fields like psychology, medicine and education, of which experience and person to person interactions are of utmost importance. Psychiatrists need to listen to their clients about problems that they have undergone before giving any counsel. Doctors must conduct a survey of patient history as well as a thorough examination of the ongoing disease in order to render a diagnosis. Students cannot make any headway in their studies without the experience and guidance of a teacher. Whilst knowledge is available throughout the Internet, that, by the same token, is why they need a teacher. Drenched in the abundance of knowledge, students are at a loss to select the correct one.
Hence
, many complex
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 that needs human judgement cannot be replaced by
robots
. To encapsulate, many jobs can be assigned to artificial intelligence to improve accuracy and productivity;
however
, it is unlikely for
robots
 to render
humans
 useless. Some tasks demand our 'cognitive touch'
nevertheless
. In my opinion, both
humans
 and
robots
 will play a major in the workforce, each will complement the others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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