Some people believe that a part of criminals should work for government free rather than going to jail. I am totally agree with this idea about the criminals that government charged them with petty crimes due to some reason.

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some
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as murder and abductor
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dangerous in
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and they need to punishment and go to
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prison to get a lesson and do not commit a crime again. But other
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like shoplifting does not hurt someone. So, it is better
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crimes
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provide
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a service free for the general public.
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in society have
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work in the community
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of sending them to prison they would understand the value of comfort and life better.
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, when a person who committed a crime and
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to jail
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meet the new
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with the same point of view
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to make more
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.
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, it is not a logical decision to take out the
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from prison and let them
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have
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a duty
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duty
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such
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as clean the streets or arrange some services free in
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society.
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, the
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who committed
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petty
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have rights too.
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of
prevent
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other dangers and
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criminals
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we should think more deeply and let them
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have some responsibility
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of
send
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them to jail. In brief, putting
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who are not a danger to the community in the bastille is ineffective in my opinion. Public obligation for non-violent
crimes
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benefits both association and
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. The government has a key role to deal with
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. They should supply the best environment to promote all the people in peace and love.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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