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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and are the money to improve public transportation?

#traffic #governments #tax #car #owners #money #transportation
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It is irrefutable that in a modern era the traffic is more increasing day by day. Every
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vehicles
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. Administrations put heavy
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 on private
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. And by the
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taxes
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 funds to make better public transports
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 traffic issues. The essay will
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discuss
 the benefits and drawbacks of
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measure
 in upcoming paragraphs.
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 and foremost benefit is that heavy
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 would discourage
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car owners. It would become very expensive to drive.
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 are very beneficial As the car owners using less our
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, reducing the traffic issues and pollution as well as.
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 would be that much more
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 of public transport. It is improved
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 way. It is often the case that public transport is very poor.
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 we often see old buses and trains that individuals don,t
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 . High
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enough money to make the
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 today younger generation. Turning Drawbacks to
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burden on the car drivers because these
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 are very high and fixed rate.
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 of individuals are coming
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heavily
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taxes
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. To
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 meeting. They had been waiting bus
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-3 hours and they become very late for them. In case of heavy
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taxes
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 owners don't
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. Only rich persons afford
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 whereas poor people
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. In conclusion,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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