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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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's
lives
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, good and bad
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 could happen. Some
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 believe that accepting a bad
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circumstance
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 job or shortage of
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 while some opponents argue that trying and improving
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 is better. In
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 no matter better or worst
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 is the best
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. Some
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 suggest that it is
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best to accept a bad situation since they try to comfort themselves to be able to continue their
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. To clarify, when
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 are in abnormal circumstances, they will feel sad or disappointed and comfort themselves to move on.
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, most
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 who
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unsatisfied
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 with their jobs and lack
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money
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 will convince themselves that their jobs or financial
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 are better than others.
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, it is the best
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 to accept these bad events coming
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people
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's
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 the best to so they can live their
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 easier in those negative
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.
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, some opponents argue that it is better to try and improve a bad situation,
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 as a boring job or shortage of
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 because it provides chances to
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 to get better living conditions.
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, even some jobs fail to satisfy
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's needs, they can find another suitable job. Another example is when someone lacks
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money
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 so searching
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way
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income
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 is the best
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.
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, finding other ways while experiencing a bad circumstance is the best
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 to improve better
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 of
people
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. In conclusion, some
people
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 think that accept their bad
situations
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 is better than try hard to improve them, I realized that
people
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 need to accept their unwell events
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,
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 they should find ways to overcome those bad circumstances.
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 to have better living conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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