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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The table provides information regarding the findings of a survey conducted in the year 2000 about the reasons why
people
 in Japan prefer to learn the
English
language
. Overall, it can be depicted that highest number of
people
 learned the
language
 for travelling abroad and lowest contribution was by the employees to whom
language
 training was provided. As can be depicted from the table the percentage of
people
 who learned
English
 as a
language
 for studying and working abroad are 19 per
cent
 and 9 per
cent
 respectively, it can
also
 be noted that learning another
language
 for working in a foreign country was the
second
-lowest reason.
Furthermore
, 39 per
cent
 of the public studied
English
 for business tours, making it the
second
-highest reason to learn
this
language
.
Additionally
, 17 per
cent
 and 13 per
cent
 community learned
English
 to get promoted and make new friends respectively.
Moreover
, the ratio of
people
 who studied
English
 for the reason of having a foreign spouse was 11 per
cent
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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