School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is starting to take a huge place in our daily lives. Indeed, even
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are now used at school which
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alarmed
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some people who think that children are becoming far too dependent on
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they claim to forbid using
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in the classroom at all
cost
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in order to go back to teaching basic study
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. In
this
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essay, I will provide arguments against
this
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opinion which is, from my own point of view, excessive.
Firstly
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,
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at school are only used in order to work. Generally speaking, when children are dependent on
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laptop

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labtop
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this
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is because of social networks or
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games, whereas in the classroom,
such
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activities are obviously forbidden.
The teenagers
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are most of
time
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more connected than their elders but
that is
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directly due to the increase of the presence of technology in our
every day
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lives.
For instance
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, working on a
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might be more useful whether the student
do
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not understand a word or a tricky detail, he can
looking
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for it on the
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. Indeed, it is sometimes faster to take notes on a laptop than with a pencil. To give another example, if an undergraduate student
need
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to prepare
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conference, organising a diaporama
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this
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will be largely easier on a specific application than drawing on paper.
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, a
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has a large range of storage which is not the case with paper files.
On the other hand
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, working online should not be the only way of work because having a cut of networks or making any error can
canceled
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evrything
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everything
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which is a huge
lost
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of time. Indeed, basic study
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was
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crucial as well because The
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might not be here
during
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all our lives. But even
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that, for some subjects like mathematics ,
writting
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equations on
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paper is essential, teenagers can not do
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on
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.
For example
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,
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on online files need
many
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any

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touch
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required and
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is not enough touch on a
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for mathematic signs. We can
also
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notice that basic
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might be important but reading or
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on a desk-
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do not affect our
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. To conclude, I believe that children use more pens than
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computer
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during their elementary school .
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,
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last
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might be very useful during
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or for the university. I do not think that
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are so
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for students
,
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when they are used properly.
Hence
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in the future, I think that everyone will use the
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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