Sports which are violent, such as boxing and wrestling have no place in a civilised society and should be banned. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Sports are a great means of portraying one's expertise despite it being violent or gentle. Games

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as boxing and wrestling

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out the true potential in a person. It has given us many famous and strong personalities who have created

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like Muhammad Ali, Mike Tyson and many others.

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, I completely disagree with the statement that boxing should be banned in a civilised society. I will explain my reasoning in

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essay.

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, people participate in athletics like wrestling because they are ardent about it and enjoy doing it. It

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helps to remove young boxers from poverty when they find themselves in a situation where all other doors are closed. Apart from that, it teaches young folks to look after their bodies.

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, if someone really wishes to be successful

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they need

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degree of physical fitness. It teaches discipline. As well as things like exercise and diet and

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informs players when and when not to fight.

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, establishes mental and physical control.

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, it educates youths about

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so that they can protect themselves in need. To illustrate, if a person falls prey to some goons

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he or she can use the tactics learnt to save themselves.

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, there is no general intent to injure the opponent in

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athletic. Rather, the primary aim is to score the most by hitting strictly defined regions of the body. And at the very least, it can provide a sense of self-respect. To conclude, pugilism involves fighting but it is not physically aggressive like rugby or ice hockey. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I totally detest and oppose the statement regarding the ban of

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sport. People play it because they enjoy doing it and

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it increases self-esteem.

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