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do you think that ocean exploration is as important as space exploration

#ocean #exploration #space
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The debate of, if we should give priority to the exploration of
space
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 or the
ocean
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, started a long time ago and even though
space
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 is widely more popular, I believe without a doubt that exploring
space
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 isn't as important as exploring the
ocean
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, to illustrate, the
ocean
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 can provide us with immediate resources, the accessibility and cost to explore it is far more efficient, it is less impactful to the environment and it can help control climate change. To demonstrate why i think that the oceans are more important, let's start with the following, the earth is warming and the effects are highly negative, one of the main causes of
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 is CO2, so
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, let's take into account the fact that the oceans serve as carbon skinks,
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, if we were to increase the
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's capacity to absorb CO2, we could decrease global warming, unlike rockets, that generate 75 tonnes of CO2 per passenger.
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, accessibility and costs are harder to cover when going on a
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 mission,
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, the
ocean
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 is easily accessible and requires less money than a rocket does,
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 if we're successful we are provided with new discoverments and resources that we can access immediately,
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, if it was in
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, it will be harder to really profit.
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, the act of exploring the
ocean
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 is far more productive, environment friendly, and profitable than it is exploring
space
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due to
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 its high costs, unfriendly environmental practices and a harder path to real profit.
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