***Task:*** *You recently bought an item online. When it was delivered you found that the item did not work correctly. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter,* *• Describe the item and the problem with it* *• Explain why the item is important for you* *• Say what you want the manager to do*

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Ege, and I am writing
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letter to express my dissatisfaction with the headphones I bought from your website on 21st May with order number 735523. The headphone delivered to me
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morning. Upon arrival, I discovered that one of the plastic covers was missing on the left side.
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, the same part on the right side was so loose that it was about to fall off.
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, the sound quality was better than I expected. I am working online, so
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I use headphones from 8am to 6pm. My current headphones are not functional anymore,
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I was impatiently waiting for the order I made. The product still has the tag on it, and I humbly request a replacement with the new one. I hope that
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matter can be resolved swiftly. If you require
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information, do not hesitate to contact me. Yours faithfully, Ege

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Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more detail about the problem and what action you want.
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Task response: Say clearly if you want a full refund or a new item, and when you need it.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some sentences need better grammar to sound more natural.
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Coherence and cohesion: Use clear link words like also, so, and because in the right place.
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Task response: You cover all three points in the task.
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Task response: Your tone is polite and right for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea.
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