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some people look forward to a year of travelling, a 'gap year', before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For all of us travelling is a way of escaping real life and somehow meditate and calm ourselves, away from all the routines and life anxieties. Some people would prefer a particular
time
 of the
year
 which is known as the 'gap
year
' to start their journey, while others suppose the other way around due to high expenses and crowded places. In my
point
 of view, the
second
 party might have a better
point
.
To begin
 with, it must be said that not all people have the opportunity to
travel
 whenever they feel like it and they have no options but to wait for the right
time
.
Although
this
 'gap
year
' is the busiest
time
 of
year
, they still would adore going on vacation because they might not be able to regain their energy some other
time
.
Furthermore
, they just turn a blind eye to most of the expenses and noisy places to enjoy their freedom while they still have
time
. As an example, one could
point
 out the Christmas holidays where most of the hotels are booked even though the prices are sometimes doubled or tripled.
On the other hand
, some would claim it is a waste of money and
also
time
. Not being able to use all the facilities they have planned for, and expenses higher than usual can be perfectly good reasons for
this
 group to skip travelling at
this
time
 of
year
. The ones who agree with
such
 an idea might simply indicate that we are willing to use our day-offs if we want to
travel
,
instead
 of experiencing inconvenience. To make it more tangible, it can be said that statistics show that most Europeans stay home during the Christmas holidays and
travel
 some other
time
 of the
year
 just to avoid the
travel
 peaks. To sum up, we could
point
 out that whilst some parties forget about the disadvantages of travelling during 'gap
year
' and would go for it anyway; others think is not logical to risk it and would wait for some better
time
 to have their trip. As it was mentioned before, I personally could not agree more with the
second
 party due to more reasonable reasons.
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