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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this overweight the disadvantages?

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Many research articles have proved the fact that learning a new speech is easier for primary
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children
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 as compared to secondary
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children
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. Learning a new
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 at an early age has numerous
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 as the brain is in its developing stages making it easier to grasp the fundamentals of the proposed subjects.
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 introduction of a new vernacular outweigh the disadvantages by a large margin. Primary
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 kids find it easier to learn new subjects and courses.
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huge scope for rapid learning. They pick up the dialect very easily. The information gathered in these years be it words and phrases of the lingo are memorized for a
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. Some scientists have proved that
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 who were taught multiple languages at an early age become bilingual or multilingual as the thought process happens in the
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 in which the conversation is being held. In India,
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 of schools teach 2 languages in
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 section. The native dialect and English.
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, most
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 in India are
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 bilingual in nature. Some
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 become multilingual as their mother
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 is different from the regional lingo.
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such
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 kids will know a minimum of three languages. The disadvantages of
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 system are that the child might find the exercise burdensome, the activity may create pressure on him to study very hard which
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 can cause an inferiority complex or dislike for the
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 brain is already developed and all the synapses are formed which reduces the concept
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 amount. The memory is not as sharp as a primary standard student. In these
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, the thought process will be in their native
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 which will be followed by the translation of thoughts in the new
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 activity
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fluency. As
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proof, I learnt Sanskrit which is very similar to my mother
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 when I was in high
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. I found it very
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 to understand the keys of proper
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 formation which affected my understanding and speaking ability. The only advantage of learning a
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 in higher sections is that of being able to choose the
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 the student wants to learn. If we take into account all of the above arguments, it is clear that learning a new
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 expanding mind that can accept all kind of information and
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 implement it readily in their thoughts and actions.
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