Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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believe that participation in the sport played in teams will bring numerous
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such
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as football,
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, many
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think that playing
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individuals is better, as tennis or swimming. In fact, when we play any sport, there are many
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, but to choose to play in groups or play individually, in my opinion, playing group
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will bring more
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. For many
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, playing individual
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is better.
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to improving health and increasing body flexibility, playing individual
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helps players
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concentration and tactical thinking ability for themselves. For individual sport, we do not need to depend on others, we can play at any time.
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as jogging, jogging helps muscles supple, toned.The
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of running is
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quite simple. You can
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jogging in the park, the spacious garden campus.
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you can
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jogging
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at home through the exercise with a treadmill.
On the other hand
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, I believe that it is more beneficial for
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when playing
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sports
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.
Firstly
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, like other exercise
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,
team
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sports
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help improve the health of the participants. These
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contribute to improving endurance and flexible coordination between muscles in the body.
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,
team
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sports
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also
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help you
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effective teamwork skills. These
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require a smooth combination and mutual understanding between
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members, players must know how to observe, grasp and coordinate with their teammates.
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, through playing
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sports
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, we can find many friends with similar interests. For the reasons mentioned above, some
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will enjoy playing
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sports
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while others prefer individual
sports
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because of the different
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they bring. It seems to me that playing
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sports
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really has a lot of great
benefits
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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