The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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has become a part of daily life. We use

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in schools, offices, and homes etc. and now it makes a great impact on criminal

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. Now numerous cases were not solved in the past because we don't have the high-

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but now it is easy to solve them. I agree that

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helps to minimise criminal

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rise cyber

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with, In the past, police records show numerous robbery cases but now there are drastic changes we can see

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because of the surveillance system.

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, today in every mall, shops, have CCTV CAMERAS, which help to prevent robbery or shoplifter because police can easily find them with the help of CCTV footage and

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if people know they are monitoring, they obey the law and stay away from unlawful

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, speed cameras

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help to prevention in traffic crime

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technology

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is really helpful in so many sectors but it

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bring new

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crimes

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nowadays are very popular. There is a number of cases we hear about related to

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cybercrime crimes

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government makes cyber cells for these types of

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. Today so many hijackers hijack bank accounts and transfer all money to their accounts and so many are not arrested since the police can't find any proof of it.

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, so many security systems

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by terrorists and it

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national security. In conclusion,

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is one of the causes of the cyber-

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a vital role in the future since it is helpful in crime rates to we can't ignore

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fact and modern crime people can handle cybercrime because they are smart.

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