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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience.

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Academic studies have become a gateway to skills and prospective jobs. Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether concentrating on qualifying in merely main
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 or pursuing some other related knowledge.
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 there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, in
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 essay I would contend that gaining as much information as possible related to the main
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 is more advisable. Two primary reasons for
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 are as follows. First of all, it is an indisputable fact that extending the horizon of knowledge could play a complementary role in fulfilling the future profession.
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 my own experiences, a salient example of
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 could be learning Python programming language geographic information systems and remote sensing students at universities, which can broaden their analytical skills in processing satellite images. So, rather than concentrating on the main
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, learning about other
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 is likely to be more constructive in the future job.
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 and even more importantly, though, is the fact that focusing solely on the issue is likely to be insufficient as the pace of life increases significantly.
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, having a grasp of psychological principles could provide a better company for doctors with their patients which, would climb the process of treatment. So, having grown up in a technology era, insisting on
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 a limited attitude would result in unsatisfying consequences. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that
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 studying for a qualification would lead to being an expert in a future job, spending time learning related
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 would be accompanied by significant advantages for the betterment of societies.
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For even greater impact, consider exploring contrasting views in more depth before presenting your conclusion.
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Inclusion of personal experiences to support your points.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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