Some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely. While others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is often argued that
,
supervising toddlers activities by their parents is advantageous. Remove the comma
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However
, other believe that more freedom
plays a crucial role in children
's life. This
essay will intend to analyse the
both views along with my perspective.
On the one hand, applying some restrictions on Remove the article
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children
and supervising them may be very beneficial for their upcoming future because they are very soft minded Change preposition
at in
in
early age. Correct your spelling
an
In other words
, in the teenage age, teenagers can take wrong steps because they do not have knowledge good choices as well as sometimes they can stuck
in bad societies. Change the verb form
be stuck
stick
For instance
, a survey was conducted by the U.S.A government in 2008 reported that the influence of bad societies are very destructive for toddlers as they spoils
their life by taking wrong decisions. Change the verb form
spoil
Hence
, this
evidence proves that parents should always supervise their children
activities to prevent inadequate aspects.
On the other hand
, by
giving more Change preposition
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freedom
to youngsters could help to improve to
their academic life Change preposition
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such
as in
an early age, students are more creative and more eager to learn new things. To elaborateChange preposition
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it
, if students have more Correct pronoun usage
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freedom
, they can try new things and become sociable. Their communication skill becomes more
better and they can express their ideas and talent very easily if they have no restrictions.
In conclusion, Change the word
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although
freedom
for children
might have some benefits. Yet, according to my point of view, if parents do not supervise their children
, they can stucked into a
numerous problems that can destroy their future completely.Correct the article-noun agreement
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