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Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. Therefore, it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Contemporarily, there is a variety of means to approach
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that is
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 useful to our life.
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, it is widely believed that there is no worth paying attention to newspapers and channels on television. I completely disagree with
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 statement because they obviously have a relative to today’s modern life.
Information
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 from mass
media
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 in general and newspaper or television
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, most have a close bond to our daily activities.
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, the advertisement in those
media
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 probably helps us to tackle
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the work we do today. To be more specific, if a smoker sees
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promotion of electrical
cigarattes
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cigarettes
cigarette
, he will be possibly saved from
Tubeculosis
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Tuberculosis
. What is more, news help us to catch up with the most recent states of the world that there is no way can do it faster
.
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 With the aid of mass
media
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, we can know more about
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 Covid pandemic so that we seemingly deal with it adequately. On the one hand, not only does news help us to improve by useful
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 but
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 hindrances viewers in two main ways.
Spengding
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Spending
to
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too
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 much
time
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 on those kinds of
information
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 can leads to
the
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 great amount of wasted
time
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. According to BBC surveys, readers can spend up to 70%
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time
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of time
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 of day
to
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reading
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a reading
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 only.
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, the untruthful
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 on mass
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 certainly makes people who absorb them face
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several problems.
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, the wrong recipes on the
televison
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television
deems
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deem
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 to take the whole family to a terrible meal.
On the other hand
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, I contend that news still makes out living qualities better in spite of causing some drawbacks for us. In conclusion, the
information
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 on
media
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 generally brings galore benefits to our life, but they can be a waste of
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 as well.
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, in my opinion, what
they
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can enhance our lives are more considerable than how
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 hours that they consume of us.
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