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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Earlier
students
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 did their higher
education
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 in their
country
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, but now due to globalisation
students
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 have a lot of opportunities to go to foreign
countries
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 for higher
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. I would like to discuss the pros and cons of
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 development in
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 essay. One advantage of pursuing higher
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 abroad is that
students
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 get to interact with different kinds of people and learn about new cultures and languages.
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 helps to enhance their perspectives.
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, recent
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 have shown that people who have studied and worked in different counties are more adaptive and knowledgeable. They can have better career opportunities because they bring new ideas and technology.
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, studying abroad has its own cons.
Students
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 who tend to go to other
countries
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 for higher
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 try to make the new
country
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 their home. They finish their
studies
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, start with their career and settle down there. For ,example many Indian
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 go to foreign
countries
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 like the United States of America to pursue their higher
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.
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 of returning to their
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 after completing their
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, they get enamoured by the sophisticated lifestyle of the rich
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 and choose to live there. In
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 way, many developing and underdeveloped
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 lose valuable human resources. In conclusion, there are both benefits and drawbacks to studying abroad. The main advantage is that the
students
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 get to learn a lot of new things while studying abroad. The main disadvantage is that they may choose not to return to their
country
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 and
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 fail to contribute to its development.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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