In the past, people used to travel to see the differences from their home country. However, the sceneries in places around the world seem similar nowadays. What are the causes of these similarities? Do you think that the advantages of these similarities outweigh the disadvantages?

Travelling cannot be stopped since it is part of human
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. People take vocation to
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another place
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place
to get a new vibe of
holiday
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even though it will spend much money.
However
, nowadays technology has changed
place
concepts by showing information about the characteristic of famous
place
that interests many people
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so that many vendors try to imitate their
tourism
place
.
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essay will figure how it can impact
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the possibility to open many tourisms
place
rather than
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the negative
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impact of imitating vibe.
First
of all, technology is bringing many opportunities to
tourism
vendor
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to advertise their attraction. Picture as, Sari Ater Hot Spring Resort which is located in south Subang, West Java, has some similarities with
Maribaya
tourism
place
in Bandung. They try to get their visitors who do not have enough money to get
vocation
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in
Maribaya
that the ticket is higher than Sari Ater.
In addition
, they provide some facilities like
Maribaya
,
such
as Horse Back Archery, cycling area, villa, and cooking class that are the best venue that they have. They use information from
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to imitate
Maribaya
’s
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attraction
attention
.
Secondly
,
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a Photo
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Photo booth
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is
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crucial part
in
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tourism
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place
that can be a reason why many tourists come to that
place
. Some vocations in Indonesia have similarities of their photo booth’s concept,
bird
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nest concept
for example
.
This
venue can easily find in
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tourism
place
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places
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especially in Bandung, like
Maribaya
, Sari Ater, The
Rinch
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Ranch
, and Floating Market. Even though it
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main attraction, it cannot decrease for people interested to visit for taking their photo with family. In the end, we cannot almost find disadvantage of similarities scenery in
tourism
place
. The visitors are still coming to spend their time with family or friends.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Homogenization
  • Architectural uniformity
  • Cultural exchange
  • International brands
  • Tourism industry
  • Urban design
  • Economic development
  • Proliferation of media
  • Cultural norms
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