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Some people believe that bicycle are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is an increasing number of
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downtown for certain reasons and
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 has caused several problems
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 as pollution as well as unemployment troubles. In order to solve these problems, governments should limit the density of
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 and citizens, themselves, should be aware of pollution-generated activities. Overpopulation of urban areas makes those zone full of pollutants. Every
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 generate a considerable amount of toxic substances like Co2 which cause an air pollution issue and
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 waste tons of foods that produce acidic gases when decomposing.
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, the growing number of
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 worsens the unemployment rate in the country as many graduates struggle to find work, even though there are limited unoccupied seats.
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, Seoul, the capital city of South Korea, has PM 2.5 and unemployment dilemmas because there is an excessive volume of
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. Tackling these concerns, the government should limit the number of
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 working in the overpopulated area, so the competitiveness could be lowered to increase the chance of getting a job offer along with the decreasing of pollutants in those areas to better the natural environment;
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, the regulations should be strict in order to make the citizen fully follow.
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, the citizen should realize that some of their activities like driving personal cars or burning papers are bad for the environment;
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, it should be reduced. In conclusion, though overpopulation causes significant obstacles, it could be solved if the government and individuals take some actions: proper regulations and awareness. At the end of the day, an overpopulated city is what one country should get rid of.
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