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It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.

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 I think that
artists
, as well as
scientists
,
scientists
 bring many benefits to
society
. It is a controversial question whether the contributions of
artists
 are more or less than the contributions of
scientists
 to
society
. For several reasons, which I will mention below, I think that both types are valuable, priceless and irreplaceable for every
society
. The contributions of
artists
 to
society
 are very essential. Art forms
people
's are so special and they have spiritual sense;
People
 learn history, the traditions of their country trough the art. We
also
 watch movies that are entertaining and at the same time extend our range of interests and knowledge about societies. Another important aspect of
this
 is that art is an ancient means of communication. In old times
people
 depicted the herds of mammoths on the walls of their caves. They performed different rituals around the fireplace asking their gods for health, good harvest and weather. Our language is a result of
people
's need to communicate. On the other side, the contribution of
scientists
 is could not be condoned. All humankind is indebted to
scientists
 because of their work and achievements.
Scientists
 make our life easier. We have cars and aeroplanes to move fast from one place to another. We have microwaves and a bunch of preprocessed food to make cooking much easier. We have different devices that simplify all we do.
Finally
,
scientists
 are making great achievements in medicine that make our life longer and happier. Nowadays
people
 have a great opportunity to do many things faster by use of computers. To sum up, I am of the opinion that
artists
 nourish our souls simultaneously that
scientists
 and technology feed our minds. So, we can not eliminate or underestimate one of them
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