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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
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From several people perspectives, young
ages
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 should be volunteers for social
work
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 in their free
time
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 because it is useful for both youngsters and the
community
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. In my opinion, I agree with
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 statement because teenagers will gain extra
experience
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, and the public will have more labour to drive their activities.
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 of all, the reason why I agree with it is youngsters will acquire special
experience
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. When they spend their free
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 with a voluntary job, they will obtain some lessons that they can not learn in school and it will help them to be a benefit in their future career.
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, my sister who used to be a volunteer works with an overseas company. She has more
experience
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 than other co-workers in dealing with older customers. She said she spent her
time
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 after finished studying to do unpaid
work
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 in her
community
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 activities,
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 she had to
work
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 with various old
ages
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, and it is an advantage for her current job. The
second
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 reason is the
community
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 has more employees to operate their job. Some voluntary businesses have limited workers,
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 having volunteers who are young
ages
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 will help them to manage their
work
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 smoothly. One of the charity shops in my country,
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, has a large number of clients on weekday evenings,
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 it lacks employees to take care of their customers. After they received help from teenagers who wish to spend their free
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 doing unpaid
work
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, they are able to deal with their consumers to be better. In conclusion, I agree with youngsters should
work
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 for voluntary jobs because the young
ages
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 will acquire special
experience
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, and the
community
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 have more workers to organize their business.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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