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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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Some individuals have health problems because of increasing unhealthy
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 and having a hard time changing their sedentary lifestyles. In
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 essay, I will discuss the main source of these issues and the possible right solutions. Nowadays,
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 society is getting busier because of being inundated with tons of workloads and not having time to make healthy food.
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, many people getting into medical problems
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 as being obese.
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, several individuals are hooked on many gadgets that spending multiple of time on the screen could lead to purchasing snacks and ordering fast food easily.
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, increasing commercial
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 are significantly advertised, which people are choosing to eat fast
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 rather than healthy vegan
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 that are
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 available in the market. One possible solution would be participating in public health programs that give the community information on a healthy
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.
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, some fast
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 can
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 add to the menu a more variety of healthy
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. In that case, it can be easy to choose a more healthy
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. As well as to increase the advertisement of the proper
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 of healthy commercial
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 on televisions and even in the school environment. If the government may give attention to the health of individuals, they could decrease the price of the vegetables and fruits in the market.
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, many people can afford healthy diets in their meals. Apparently, society these days depends on their meal on an unhealthy
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 because of their busy work and lifestyle.
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, there are several ways to tackle these issues by choosing healthy
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 and being available in the market.
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