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The relatively recent development of games on phones, computers, and TV consoles is extremely popular with people all over the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such electronic games?

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The emergence of
game
 developments on many resources
such
 as phones, computers and TV consoles become mainstream in society around the world. In
this
 essay, both the positive and negative effects of
this
 matter will be outlined before reaching a conclusion.
To begin
 with, there are several advantages of playing
games
 that provide with their
players
.
Firstly
, some
games
 can be an inspiration for their
players
 to live
in
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an ordinary life,
for example
, the
game
 which is so-called "Harvest Moon".
This
game
 is about living in country communities, farming, breeding, etc,
as well as
, having a family and taking care of them .
Hence
,
players
 who play
this
game
 can learn about how to socialise with people,
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 care of themselves, and their families by starting from nothing.
Secondly
,
games
 can be a language teacher. Many
games
 these days have both subtitles and dialogue whilst characters are having conversations.
Thus
,
players
 can learn and memorise
about
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new vocabulary in order to use them in numerous situations in real life.
Additionally
, playing
games
also
 brings disadvantages to
players
. At
first,
games
 engulf
players
' time and make them become inactive by sitting with their consoles
instead
 of going outside. These problems lead to health issues
such
 as obesity and bad eyesight.
Next,
some
games
 contain
a
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violence
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 content which in turn people can see
it
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as a sample.
For instance
, GTA allows
players
 to commit crimes
such
 as using guns, stealing cars, driving without being careful and so on. If
players
 cannot distinguish what is good or bad actions, it will affect their behaviours. All in all, the development of
games
 on many resources can give
players
 both advantages and disadvantages.
Therefore
, the public should be aware of the contents of the
games
 they play.
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grammar
Ensure that all sentences are complete and free from minor grammatical errors, such as missing articles or incorrect word forms.
content development
Expand upon some points with more detailed examples or explanations to strengthen the argument.
structure
The essay is well-organized with clear introduction and conclusion.
content
The response is comprehensive and addresses both the pros and cons of electronic games.
content use
Relevant examples like 'Harvest Moon' and 'GTA' are used effectively to illustrate points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive functions
  • problem-solving skills
  • spatial awareness
  • multitasking
  • addiction
  • attention span
  • online multiplayer games
  • teamwork
  • communication skills
  • social isolation
  • economic impact
  • revenue
  • financial strain
  • stress relief
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • sedentary lifestyle
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