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some people believe that if is best to accept a bad situation. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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In modern ,society more
people
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 were preferred to allow bad situations, like dissatisfied work or lack of money.
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, some
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 were believed that the best option is hardworking and improve
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 essay will discuss both arguments and express my view and perspective.
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 with, in today’s society
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 have been more like to accept harmful situations rather than identify their negative background and mistakes. Especially in the younger generation do not like work under pressure.
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, consider with the developing country, plenty of organizations have been doing not provide proper facilities to their workers. For
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instant, poor management decisions, low working conditions and policies, low paid salaries, poor working environment, heavy financial targets, less job security and so on. These reasons are directly affected by the employee's life,
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, of that
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 are suffering from an occupational disease, high-stress level etc.
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, as a human being, you can find out various job opportunities, if you are qualified. If you didn’t like to continue your current work you can change your workplace as soon as possible, because we have a single life, why
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 might suffering from stress and mental disorders throughout the single job. On the opposite side, of
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 statement, sometimes we have to accept the worst circumstances, to protect our employees, safeguard our salary and family. In the modern ,world we cannot survive without appropriate income. Employees need to adhere to the company culture, rules, policies and background.
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, if you are doing customer service related tasks you need to improve on patience. In the end,
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case might change the situations and
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 behaviour.
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, I believe accepting the worst things is sometimes better than suffering under pressure or stress. I entirely support the
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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