Some say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Opinions differ among different sections of society. While few
people
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opine that
sports
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are just a hobby and others think it holds a significant place in the community. In
this
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essay, I will be discussing both opinions with the conclusion of my perspective. On the one hand, folks believe athletics are just like
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activity of passing time.
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,
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can be true for some
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but not for all. Children in their academic years are good at
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too and earn state and national level credentials by playing games in their free time or vacation periods.
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, many students choose
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as their
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while earns name and fame.
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, Sania Mirza, a tennis player use to play tennis in her school life and is now a
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player in the field of tennis.
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, sometimes only a hobby can be
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experience and can help
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all the dreams of a person.
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,
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do have a vital place in the world as it greatly helps in relieving one's stress.
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, not all
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are good at academics in their learning years. Every child is blessed with different
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and parents must support their children in exploring their skills in whichever field they are good at.
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, it not only serves as
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for
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entertainement
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entertainment
but
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helps in building physical strength.
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,
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athletics
holds
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a crucial part across the globe as it can help sportsmen show off their talent and help other
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as a part of
entertainment
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the entertainment
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.
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,
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olympics
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the olympics
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held
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year helped to gain large revenue through the talent of
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sports persons
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sportspersons
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. In conclusion, I completely opine that
sports
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holds
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important place in
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society and all the children or adults must always be encouraged in playing.
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,
government
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the government
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should provide
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facilities or scholarships for the training of students and let them
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achieve
success in their field of interest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social fabric
  • fostering
  • community spirit
  • health and wellness
  • national pride
  • leisure activity
  • entertainment
  • unwind
  • economic impact
  • generating jobs
  • boosting tourism
  • stimulating local economies
  • negative aspects
  • risk of injuries
  • pressure on young athletes
  • doping
  • corruption
  • essential societal component
  • responsible management
  • promoting
  • significant
  • merely
  • contributing
  • progress
  • acknowledging
  • value
  • emphasizing
  • balance
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