The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate six devices that young Canadian adults aged 18-24 utilized to watch television programmes in the years 2009 and 2019.
Overall
, one of the most salient features of the data is the transition from conventional
TV
to flat-screen
TV
over
this
period, with flat-screen TVs being the dominant medium for watching television,
along with
smartphones. It stands to reason that with the passage of time, modern devices were chosen by more people in
this
group. In 2009,
while
conventional
TV
was the most popular medium, with just over a
third
of the viewers using them, the figure was merely 4% ten years on.
This
was followed in
second
place by laptops, with one out of five people in the given group watching television programmes through them. Desktop computers were the
third
most-liked device among
this
age range, which was 2% fewer than the laptop category. Ten years later on, the figures for the former and the latter were the same percentages, which was slightly over a tenth, at 12%. By 2019, the proportion of those who viewed flat-screen
TV
had risen from 8% to 27%. It is apparent that gadgets
also
appealed to them.
Therefore
, the
second
-highest category was smartphones, with numbers approaching roughly a quarter of
this
age group. There was almost a fifth of young viewers used tablets in 2019.
This
percentage was considerably higher than that of
in
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2009.
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