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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes.

#people #children #choices #matters #society #individuals
The maps provide information about the future plan of the
Islips
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Islip
, which is recognized as a small
town
, compare to the present
town
centre
. Overall, according to the new plan, the
park
 stayed at the same place where it is now. The road system around the
town
centre
 will upgrade the dual-carriageway. A new bus station, car
park
, the shopping
centre
 will be built on the future map.
First
 of all, we can identify major development of the road system, which will provide easy access to each and every place in the new plan. There
are
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number
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a number
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 of small shops that will bring into one main shopping complex, which saves much more space for other facilities. Newly build car
park
 will provide more benefit to the new housing area and same as to the shopping complex.
Secondly
, as a negative side
town
centre
 looks more complicated than, how it is now.
Town
 authorities are
planning
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 build another couple of new residential areas,
unfortunately
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 they have decided to the reduced size of the
park
, which is people can spend their free time with family members.
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