Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people

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states that

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sports persons

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deserve to get huge

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support the statement that

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are playing

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of news circulating on

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professionals, that the

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aspirants.

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hard 24/7 for the sake of

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equal support for both the sport and

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professionals.

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial remuneration
exceptional
merit
talent
demand
entertainment value
career span
physical demands
justified
unfair
criticism
income inequality
societal priorities
sportsmanship

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Your opinion

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